Walking slowly to the end. Nothing is like it used to be. You don't know where I have been. Places full of sadness, chaos and pain.
End of time, yes I know end of time has come.
Don't get me wrong but you don't understand, you don't live in my war, a war you never can win.
End of time, the end of time has come.
Now I'm walking slowly to the end and ahave to choose the way to die...(written by Kenttu-72)
End of time, yes I know end of time has come.
Don't get me wrong but you don't understand, you don't live in my war, a war you never can win.
End of time, the end of time has come.
Now I'm walking slowly to the end and ahave to choose the way to die...(written by Kenttu-72)
Vastaukset 6
Vanhimmat
kyllähän tämä hyvä runo on..
DarkSoul, tuntuuks vähä paskalta sanoo et jonku runo on oikeesti hyvä? Eiks kellää muulla sais olla hyvii runoi ku sul? Et sä kuule oo mikää maailman napa! Ja tästä runosta.. Oli ERITTÄIN HYVÄ! Ite en osaa kirjottaa mitää, pari yritystä kyl on.
anteeksi nyt vaan, jos osaisin hymyillä, hymyilisin, koska pidän siitä runosta.. olen vain synkkä ihminen.. minulle tuottaa vaikeuksia ilmaista miten paljon pidän asioista, mutta mitä se sinulle kuuluu?
ajattelin vielä lisätä, että runoni ovat minun mielestäni aivan surkeita.
tulla vaan,kuuntelen mielellään...ja tiedoksi muille että kohta saatte lisää jos haluatte,kirjoitin muutama runo lisää vapun alla....
I know something about poems. Not much, but enough to give you some feedback.
Personally I don't fancy much about this kind of sombre poems dealing about ultimate misery (for I try very hard to be happy). Anyhow that doesn't make it good or bad.
The thing is there are vast quantities of same kind of gloomy material here in this forum. I don't deny the fact that this poem might have very significant meaning for you in person, but to me and many others it is just a moderate poem about life, death agony and pain as I shall prove to you by adding a poem written by me in the end of my comments.
If you write about something that too many people have already written you would have to be a master with words to make something really good out of it. Anyway, don't be too discouraged about my comments. Clearly you have skills to write considerably better poems. You just have to discover more interesting subject!
And of course it's also nice to see some English poems here =).
At the end of my days
All the light is gone
Gone... Forever lost in the twilight.
Darkness gathering upon me
A plague of solitude gnaws my soul
The further I pass beyond this life
The deeper I shall find it's teeth in flesh
I'm a tortured soul to the bone...I know.
So here is my demonstration. I can write a gloomy poem (even if I didn't want to write one). Most of us could. Still there are better subjects to write about. Of course I admit that there are people who likes this genre and it's ok with me and as a test I'm also going to put this poem in the main forum to see if I people really like my dismal poem.