Sweet child O` mine
did you trye to tell me
mom : "I live in hell"
or was it just a fantasy
You see it does not matter
what you wanted
out of me
It is only sometimes
what you do want to see
I tell you this,
You must belive
to take some strong advice
please, only this time
trye to think it twice..
Life is life
it´s not a sweet dream
people mistake
people f u c k u p
and then they screem
eveyone has their problems
and no one
lives free from pain
please trye to
leave it all behind
and do not choose to
go insane
I love you most
I allways will
There is this thing
no one can kill
I see your beauty
Why can not you?
I see you feel quilty
but why do you do?
I hope you´re happy
why will not you?
There is no shame
there will be no pain
When you find your
true way
- and no one left to claim
did you trye to tell me
mom : "I live in hell"
or was it just a fantasy
You see it does not matter
what you wanted
out of me
It is only sometimes
what you do want to see
I tell you this,
You must belive
to take some strong advice
please, only this time
trye to think it twice..
Life is life
it´s not a sweet dream
people mistake
people f u c k u p
and then they screem
eveyone has their problems
and no one
lives free from pain
please trye to
leave it all behind
and do not choose to
go insane
I love you most
I allways will
There is this thing
no one can kill
I see your beauty
Why can not you?
I see you feel quilty
but why do you do?
I hope you´re happy
why will not you?
There is no shame
there will be no pain
When you find your
true way
- and no one left to claim
Vastaukset 9
Vanhimmat
Nice ;)
kiitti
I don't really understand what's the message here? Maybe it's because your english is not too good (sawrry), but if you work on it, you would make some great poetry!
Ehkäpä oma englantisi nyt hieman ontuu.. ellet yksinkertaista sanomaakaan bonjannut.
I see, okay, you know true artist can take critic without taking it too personally. To be honest, i don't buy you're one. I can see very clearly, that you have just wrote some words which you think would rhyme, and look even somehow, reasonable.
And the thing that makes me fucking angry, is the fact that you have the nerve to write this shit to my poems, when it's supposed to be about what i wrote, NOT YOU.
..kyllä..osaan Englantia,, ehkä vikana murteet..sielläkin..
vaan osaisitko suomeksi saman..
voisi olla helpompaa. muillekkin
Kiitän etukäteen..jo näin kauniisti..
kiiti Chi..
??? juuh.. eikä tätäkään pastaa kuules collectmypeaces ny tarvii tässä tämän enempää jauhaa. Sinun "kritiikkisi" on turhaa kiukuttelua. Taidat olla kovin kovin nuori vielä. Käännä toki katseesi pois ellei tekstini miellytä.. hyvää jatkoa valitsemallesi tielle!
lisäys: en koe olevani todellinen "SUURI taiteilija " jota ei saa kritisoida, mutta koska itse koet varpaillesi tallotun, en toiste käy lukemassa enkä vastaamassa mitään. Tuskin käy kukaan muukaan tällä palstalla. Meinaan se vastaukseni ole ollut tarkoitettu sinulle, vaan erilliseksi vastaurunoksi jonka luokittelet paskaksi (koskei ole omaa käsialaasi). Jokunen kumminkin tästä on pitänyt siellä sinunkin tekstisi alla näemmä..
Onija, kiitos visiitistä!